Wow.
I like your voice bro(no homo) it sounds good for a song like this. when it gets to the chorus the second time,you should get louder instead of softer. it makes for a better musical effect,a kind of contradiction.. as for the lyrics,i can relate to them,so good job on making them on a basic topic,but you kinda lost a point for doing it. try making parody songs or writing lyrics on completely random things. it will help with choosing topics for songs,instead of just the normal indie stuff like love and enjoying life. try adding drums after the first chorus as well,it would make it seem much more musically progressive. just my 2 cents. hope you liked the review,and i hope i can hear more of your voice!(once again,no homo)
7/10 3/5