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[KKS - The Eye of Dawn]

FTW

I like the chords,i like the rhythm,i like everything in this song;except for one thing- and one thing only.

there isn't a different chord progression. in the entire song! honestly,the least you could do is change keys,because one's attention span can only be for so long. you should really try working on that,even if this is an ambient song.

also,the birds get annoying after a while,and it's okay that they come in at the end,they're just staying too long in the beginning of the song,almost into 2 minutes.

overall,it's decent for an ambient piece,but the basis is too repetitive.

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KKSlider60 responds:

Opinions. ^^
Thank you for your review,
KKS

[The Corridors of Time]

latin remake of a BGM?!

Never heard about that happening,now i know.

this reminds me of a MMORPG im constantly on/off about-Mabinogi. if you've ever actually played the game you might know what im saying.

Of course the main melody is repetitive,but you could've variated the theme up a lot,and maybe add a key change or something to change up what once was a childhood memory into a nostalgic experience.and complicate the bongo beat. i want to hear some 16th notes on that bongo!

the vocals were actually VERY VERY well played. never heard anyone else have such a good mic,and i've never heard such great harmonization!

the only reason im not giving you a 10 is because of two things:

-1[the simplicity of drum beat and lack of true change in chords like a key change]
-1[it's a remix]

you should try writing your own pieces,because if you can do this to a BGM,im quite curious what you can do on your own!

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Twone responds:

I didn't really want to stray too far from the original song with a key change or a huge modulation, but you may be right, I could have possibly pulled something off. You are also right that the beat could have been more varied as well, but I wanted to keep it a little simple. The vocals took me FOREVER to get down, so I'm glad you appreciate those too.

I do write my own music, but I like remixes too because they're just so much fun. And popular.

Thanks for your review! :)

[Stargenx - Monolith]

Epic Montage?

I Applaud you sir.you can truly write music like a pro.

i like the oboe/flute that you're using,it gives the song a feeling of hope and such. you have a great transition between minor and major chords.the chords are well versed,and it seems more like a Concerto than anything.the drums have accents,which i like,and the violins have a repeated rhythm that works(it always does work when it's the violins)

from what i hear,there's an electric bass in this song.

I have to say though,the drum beat could be a bit more complicated,don't you think? i also think the other instruments should have a chance to have the melody,which is why i said it seems more like a Concerto rather than an epic song. you should also give more volume to the song,it's too robotic,the dynamics.and a key change,even for a song so short.

overall,it's a good song,but it's not musical at all,if you get what im saying. experiment,do loads of stuff that you're not supposed to do in music,see how that turns out! it's always fun experimenting,if you don't know what you're doing.i ask that you try harder next time.

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Stargenx responds:

Thanks for the review! I'm working on getting better dynamics, percussion and whatnot in newer songs, don't worry. I'm constantly improving.

[J@Ks Zoom Guitar Jam 4]

Jam Session?

This is a bit overdone. i think you're using to much gain,it sounds like a car engine.if you're just showing us your abilities,then you have a pretty varied set of abilities,and you can use them in decent combination.

im a fan of the electric guitar and i love to hear some screeching once in a while,but i don't think you've mastered this skill yet. try using your skills in the midst of a song,and see how that works. it takes time to master something,so don't get frustrated.

i suggest to kick off the gain,give it more of a clean feel,and lower the mic volume,i can hear you hitting the frets like you're going crazy(and i can hear the strums). good thing,but also a bad thing if you're going to record actual songs. thats just my two cents.

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gamejunkie responds:

The gentleman playing this piece has over 50 years playing experience, its not the playing that's bad. I was getting used to a new Zoom controller and the quality of the recording is not the best. But it was a Jam session with friends after all. BTW if you knew who was playing this your head would probably explode. And your comments would be a lot different.

[-)S(- Celestial Midway]

Nostalgia

I Really like this song. the synths you use sound a lot like many old games,and surprisingly,the melodic synth comes up in alot of techno nowadays i believe,which is very weird. i really like the nice little grace note trill you have going on right before the deceptive cadence/minor chord you use near the end of the main melodic line. this song is very well made,and i respect you for it. the song not only made me smile,but it made me look back on the really good games back then,like sonic heroes(it was a good game IMO),mario 64,and Majora's Mask,and how as a little kid i got frustrated over them.

Now to the cons of video game songs. most retro songs (not even the moon theme from ducktales is an exception) are in 4/4,meaning the drum beats are very simple. you should try making it a slight more complicated,and maybe even have a drum fill? that would be really cool. also,the "wah wah" fading in and out was a bit annoying,sometimes it was in the way,sometimes not,but it was getting old.

thats pretty much all the bad this song had.i absolutely love this song,it was heaven to my ears when i first heard it(currently on third playthrough as im writing this) Great job as a first 2011 submission!

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Will responds:

Thanks for reviewing. Good counter-point of the wah-wah sound of the pad; I call that "Stupor's First Attempt at Side-Chaining". :P

[GirlStep - North Face (WIP)]

This is a nice WiP for a first song!

i can imagine you've made music before,but this is actually pretty well made nevertheless. there are a few things though. although you have wub wubs, you seem to keep to the same four on the floor style as techno is.which is what dubstep wants to get away from,im sure you understand. also,it's a bit repetitive. if it were up to me,this song would be about 2 and a half minutes. also,you should speed it up a small bit to make it a bit more of a 'fun' track if you get what i mean. i know you're new here,and i know im still relatively new here,and sure,im only 14,but that doesn't mean anything when it comes to musical talent.just try doing at least one of the things i have said so far and i'll review your next piece accordingly. good first try though,i wont lie. hope to see you improve from it! =)

7/10 3/5

GirlStep responds:

Alright, I'll see what I can do. I was trying to go more for a Glitch House Skrillex-esque track. However there are not generic house drums during several parts of the song including the first drop and during the buildup before the second drop and the second drop itself. :P

But hey, thanks for giving my song a listen and leaving song honest feedback. At least you didn't rate this song 10/10 just because I have boobs (which is weird because you're 14 :P).

[Pre-Legacy]

short?!

hell,a short loop is maybe 10-15 seconds. this loop is positively one of the longest i've ever heard,even though it's repetitive. try cutting down on the size of the loop honestly if you can;it was repetitive(as much as loops are,still have to say it) and it could've maybe stopped at like forty seconds. try putting a melody in as well? people love variety(i sure do!) and it wouldnt hurt to think of a little melody than hearing chords the whole time. i can tell you've probably just started making music,seeing as such your oldest piece that you have posted on newgrounds is only recently; in april. i hope you can take my constructive criticism and try experimenting with my advice i've given.
overall,it's relaxing,but it's too repetitive. i hope you can improve and become better =)

6/10 3/5

Rinibra responds:

I don't know what I was thinking when I said "short" loop. lol. I guess I could work on this more and re-post another version of it. Honestly, I didn't really know where I was going with this. Right now I'm kind of experimenting with everything in FL Studios, and I don't know too much about the different new plugins that I'm running into. I'll give it another go

[Closer to Tomorrow]

Wow.

I like your voice bro(no homo) it sounds good for a song like this. when it gets to the chorus the second time,you should get louder instead of softer. it makes for a better musical effect,a kind of contradiction.. as for the lyrics,i can relate to them,so good job on making them on a basic topic,but you kinda lost a point for doing it. try making parody songs or writing lyrics on completely random things. it will help with choosing topics for songs,instead of just the normal indie stuff like love and enjoying life. try adding drums after the first chorus as well,it would make it seem much more musically progressive. just my 2 cents. hope you liked the review,and i hope i can hear more of your voice!(once again,no homo)

7/10 3/5

Evilxy responds:

thanks for the review, I like the input, I think ill try the change on the second chorus.

This is really our first go at recording the song, will be adding drums.

I needed to do this song... Now that its down on paper and actually a song, I can move on to other stuff.

Thx again and I will definitely have more stuff up soon.

[Rainbow Land]

WELL,

i don't mean to be a party pooper,but isn't "The Disturbing Truth" supposed to hint to a depressing/agressive song? well,never mind that. you're focusing on the main melody too much,try to split up your music in parts,like say [Versex2-Main Melody-Verse_Variationx2-Main Melody-Breakdown(or solo)-Key Change-Main Melody] that may have been confusing or not,but you should experiment with lots of things,like instrumentation,synths,DRUM BEATS(unce unce wont help you here) and the works. it's a nicely made song,but i feel it's TOO repetitive,even if it's just trance. nicely done for just an hour though,but thats what happens when you try to rush things. next time,take your time making your music.trust me on this,it has helped me ALOT and i've become a much better composer than in the past,so try experimenting and taking your sweet time(even if you bite more than you can chew) i hope to hear further improvement from you =)

7/10 3/5

Everratic responds:

Thanks for your help. I will try to add in more melodies.

[[S_Rock] Cause I'll Find You]

This is quite surprising.

i like how this song starts out with an intro,but it's a bit too short.it's a cool song,i would love to hear some lyrics on that(and if you're developing a version with lyrics,even better!) im assuming that the electric guitar is in the chorus,which in that case settles that your repeating the chorus way too much,even if it's just 2 minutes long,but that is just my opinion. great work! i cant hope to hear a version with lyrics,or more recent beats from you!

S-Rock responds:

well in all fairness... this is a beat.. there are no lyrics and it was uploaded because it is such.. therefor thinking chorus verse chorus verse bridge yada yada time 2 seconds long then you're only dismantling your ability to feel the music.. which is what i try to do.. is pull emotion from someone.. so if you wanted lyrics perhaps i could pull emotion so you can make them? =D